Freida’s Critique
Lights
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From the bar scene on, gradually make the lights darker.
Loved side lights.
Light on Moe with the flask in the Lee and Moe scene.
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Music
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Start He Loves She Loves BEFORE Rose’s line about Funny Face
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Quinn, Frank, Rian
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Rehearse the dance a lot so that you will be more comfortable with dancing.
Keep your head up.
Frank, good job listening.
As Rian, do not push bush.
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Robertson
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Keep your head up. React to Clarence.
Plant your feet. Listen and react.
Stay on stage the entire time. When you walk and talk, it does not work.
Fix the pocket or let me fix it.
Use your hat to talk. Put your jacket over your shoulder. Take your hat off when inside.
Robertson, I don’t know what Freida meant.
Your hat covers your face.
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Lights and sound are great
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Entrances and exits were great with sound and music.
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Clarence
Banks
Kapush
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Good reaction.
Act with disbelief when you talk about being in LA
Back off of Kapush in welfare scene.
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The Baum family
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Great job
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Maid Maria / Diana/Ms. Graham
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Great job.
Keep the drunken character. Almost miss the chair.
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Fanny
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Believable
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Moe and Rose
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We need to see your bodies age as the play progresses. We need to see a physical change. Begin to do the things that you used to do then don’t.
Fake flowers magic trick – move more left stage so that Lee is not blocking.
See aging
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Moe
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Get
See the boarder work on those two lines.
Put water in flask. It sounds empty and it doesn’t look like you are drinking.
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Grandpa
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Keep your head up. Be harder to get along with – harder to get used to change.
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Dancers
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Polish this.
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Robertson & Rosman
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These are key lines. Market – cash in. Rosman must react.
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Irene
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Plant your feet and be more powerful. More emotional - cookin
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Rose and Grandpa
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Too rushed.
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Quinn and Robertson
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Both have happy feet. Listen to each other. Stress how can there be an America. We will cut some
You were better with Ms. Graham.
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Miss Fowler
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More confidence and have more authority in your role.
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Moe and Lee
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Need more from Moe. It should be hard to say, hard to ask for money. Lee be surprised.
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Bar scene
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When Robertson says They start believing - everyone freezes and stay frozen until after Irene’s line.
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Everyone
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If you wear white after the bar scene, we need to change it.
Please look at the blog that told who was shabby and who was not. We need more people downstage. Remember what Freida suggested.
Cut marathon dancers.
Slow motion in back all the time except the bank scene.
When Irene is on stage, we need people walking. Ty, Hannah A and Abbey are ragged people. We need about four others to walk past them. Interact with each other.
If you have read this far, tell me what you can do specifically to make this a better show. You have been asked this before, so give me a new answer. Text or reply on blog.
After the welfare scene, it was very loud exiting and loud backstage.
At the end, when the clock is ticking, enter and keep entering as the music plays.
End with Lee’s last line.
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Sidney, Franny, Doris
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Good job!
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Lee and Rose
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Great together
Unison lines - rehearse
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Grandpa and Rose
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Need more of a relationship.
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Lee
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Mississippi speech. Vary tempo – anger has a smell.
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Sidney & Doris
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Good job.
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Welfare office
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People noises. Moe age a lot here
Fight scene great.
React more to fall. React to Moe giving a dime for milk.
Kapush watch overacting.
Irene – watch pacing. Solidarity – look at lines.
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Sidney
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As cab driver- change look.
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Moe Lee Rian Abbey
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See – Lee face the audience,, be more in shock.
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Lee and Edie
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I’m lonely – arms around Edie. At the end, Edie, be into yourself –arms around yourself
Edie, We are seeing too much of your back. Stay on floor with the book at first. Let Lee move down to you. Lee, put your clothes to the left of Edie so that we can see her face as she picks them up to throw. Emotion has to build to throwing the clothes at Lee.
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Women’s group
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Age cards.
More relationship with grandpa and women.
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Rose
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Take time – work on the monologue. Cover your ears.
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Moe and Rose
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Start to go to answer the door. Rose gestures or puts out her hand to stop him.
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Moe
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Country can’t (goes down)
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Everyone did SO good today!
ReplyDeleteI think that to make this a better show, I could definatly work on the dance and shouting at Hayden when he runs through the bank scene
ReplyDeleteI need to feel every word I'm saying as though it's actually happened to me in real life. I need to connect with Irene better.
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ReplyDeleteI could polish off the banks monologue and kapush
ReplyDeleteI should help organize and stay onto of the books and make extra sure everyone is doing what they should be
ReplyDeleteI could be more intrested in the scenes that are going on, put more feeling into my lines, and try to make the show feel as real as possible to us on the stage and the audience! ~Paige
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You know this is not just a one man show. And it is each of our jobs to play each of our part to make a whole. To make my character tye best she can be, im going to work on stage business, watch other actors and learn from them and take my critiques in a positive way and learn from it.
ReplyDeleteWorking on it... It was hard to enunciate I couldn't breathe very well..
ReplyDeleteGet my music cue's perfect!
ReplyDeleteI will make my monologue more of a story instead of just saying my linea
ReplyDeleteWork on the aging of my body, the relationship between moe and rose!
ReplyDeleteControl my feet movement and fix the pocket. And just in general continue to work hard.
ReplyDeletegood job everyone! Ill try to change fast so i can be on stage as much as possible, and more reaction when ty falls in the welfare office!
ReplyDeleteTo make my character better, I can work on more emotion with Orby and My scene where he ask for money, and start being forceful with Edie in my scene to make it the bad side of my character. I can also walk more in the back.
ReplyDeleteHayden, I think when you first speak of Edie to the audience, have a swagger in your walk and speak of her with a degrading tone. We do need to see the other side of your character.
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